LJ Zone

Tomorrow is very happy day, because it is Friday and also “Halloween day” Halloween day is that people enjoy with everybody. When I lived in Korea, it didn’t have Halloween day, so I couldn’t do Halloween party. Now I can enjoy Halloween party, because I study the international school, so I will go to school Halloween party.

            Tomorrow the party will be very fun. We will do eating with very nice food like cookie, candy, bread, something drink. After eating we will do dancing, I am not confident about dancing, but just will just enjoy it. And than we will have something horror show with my friends. I think that it will be very nice

I studied in Korean middle school for 3 years. Now I study at an international school on Phuket. I don’t know much about international schools, but I have a feeling about it. They have same things and different things.

They have very few similar things. They teach the same subjects. They have the same class structure. They both have students governments, they have the same way of voting the students government. They both finish a school at same time. They have a dining room too. I think that they are both very nice.

They are also some difference. They use different languages, so the international school is difficult to me. Also it has many different people, but Korean school has just Koreans. There are very different teachers and students communication. Korean teachers are very serious, but international school teachers are very friendly and nice. They are very good to me. They have different system about education. When I study in Korean, If I didn’t pass the test and Just failed, I didn’t have more chance, but international schools have many chances. It is better than Korean school. Finally I think that international schools are better than the Korean schools.

I had a very nice time during the last summer vacation, because I visited my family and friends in Korea for 1 month. Before I moved to Thailand, I was always feeble because I didn’t want to part with my family and friends. Also my family didn’t want to part with me. My grandmother couldn’t wait to see me, so my parents bought me a ticket to Korea.

Finally, I went to Korea. When I came to Inchon international airport, I didn’t believe that this is Korea, so I was very happy. I went to my real home. It changed too much for 1 year. I had a very nice time with my family. They gave much food, so

I always ate very delicious Korean food and fruits. They wanted to talk about QSIP, so I said that it is very nice school, I got a new friends. They felt easy about worry me. And then I met my Korean friends. I was very exciting. Also they were happy to meet me. I had very nice time with my friend too. I went to theme park, PC-Zone, swimming pool, beach and pension. I got many good memorizes.

The time of go to Thailand followed. I was sad, because I wanted to stay in Korea more. My parents wanted that I go to Thailand early, because they didn’t want me forget English. My grandmother was sad too, because she thought she couldn’t wait me for 1year. Also my friends too, but I just went to Thailand, because I decided. I will be successful.

Hi LJ. Just a few things you need to correct in this piece. Here they are

I will introduce my family. My name is LJ. I am 16years old. When I was young, I lived in Seoul with my grandparents and my parents and my sister. My grandmother’s name is Kyeong Hee. She is very beautiful and nice. She likes me very much, so nowadays my grandmother is sad, because I stay in Phuket. She wants me come back early. She has a house, so we live the same house. My grandfather’s name is Dong Soo. Also he is very handsome and nice to me, but he died in 2001, so I was very sad during 1year. My mother’s name is So young. She is very pretty and nice to me, also nowadays she is sad, because I stay in Phuket. My father’s name is Sang Won. He is blunt to me, when I was young, I didn’t like my father, but now I like very much. My parents have the Korean restaurant. My sister’s name is Yoo Jin. She is very cute and kind to me. I love my family very much.

I will introduce my family. – Nothing grammatically wrong here but I think you need to make a better introduction. This is very short and blunt.

My name is LJ. I am 16years old. – Join these sentences together using a conjunction (and)

I am 16years old. – need a space

When I was young, I lived in Seoul with my grandparents and my parents and my sister. – … , … and …

She likes me very much, so nowadays my grandmother is sad, because I stay in Phuket. – Get rid of the comma

She has a house, so we live the same house. – Tense, Need a Preposition

She wants me come back early. – to come back early.

Also he is very handsome and nice to me, but he died in 2001, so I was very sad during 1year. – Tense, need a space

She is very pretty and nice to me, also nowadays she is sad, because I stay in Phuket. – Runon sentence

He is blunt to me, when I was young, I didn’t like my father, but now I like very much. – Tense, Runon sentence

My parents have the Korean restaurant. – Article (‘a’, not ‘the’)

Good work on this. Make the changes quickly because you have a lot of other work to do. When you have made the changes, delete this post.

Mr Andrew

I live in the best island in the world!!! It is Phuket, in Thailand. Phuket is very famous because Phuket has many beautiful beaches, also many bars and clubs in Patong, so many tourists come to Phuket, and many students study in Phuket. I study in Phuket too. I live in Villa Suan Luang. It is a very new villa. Last December I moved house. I was the first to live in the house, so it was very clean, but it had a bad smell. It has 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms and a kitchen. It also has a garden. It is a small house, but I am satisfied because it is near Central and QSI. I can go to there by motorbike. My Villa has many Thais, Europeans and Koreans, so I can talk with my neighborhood. I can speak Thai and English better, because when I talk with my neighborhood, I speak Thai and English, so I study language itself. I live with my aunt, uncle, cousin and grand parents. They are very full of live, so when I am sad, they make me have a smile, also my aunt and grand mother cook Korean food very well, so I always happy to every meal. My uncle is photographer, so when I have a weekend, my uncle teaches to take photo for me, so I can take photo well. Every day I am happy, so I can live Thailand longtime.